Intensive labour required

I really want to like this ad for Kiwi beer brand MOA but the quality of the copywriting just irks me.

Is it grammatically correct?

Probably.

I just find its attempt to be clever is coming across a little clumsily.

Nice idea.

But if I was the CD on the job I'd have told the writer to keep polishing.

Title: Intensive labour required
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